Monday, September 3, 2012

Strangers in the Night


Its morning, shouts the alarm!!!
In bed, I still lie calm
You are already in the bathroom
I’ve to use the other room

I’m ready, Oh my hair is not done
gelling the crop I also put perfume
You are in the car, I get
the aroma makes u hume
but to comment u resist
I feel my new cut, you notice
I want to insist,
but the urge to ask I dismiss

On way to work
Talking is a big task
Its been busy day
In the evening, how was the day
I wish, you ask

I come home, its
back to usual ritual
you give me ritual hug
I pour you coffee
in the usual mug

On your chest
my head I rest
our hearts are at mess
wish its just stress
all work and no play
god please bless this bed,
where strangers in the night lay
                                                                                                                                                                       KARAN

58 comments:

  1. hmmmmm,..its a good take on the topic indeed!
    didnt participate in BAT this time????


    hey, also if you would turn off the word verification in the comment section, It would simplify the comment process!... just a suggestion ! :)

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    1. cud not post it as unfortunately my system crashed on sunday

      and surely i'l do away with the word verification

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  2. hey good one ... sad that u missed the deadline...

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    1. thnx amit...keep dropping by :)
      there's always a next tym i guess

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  3. Now days its very usual when husband wife become strangers in the night.. all this due to overloaded with office work and other small unresolvable issues :(

    I hope you will get chance to participate in BAT

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    1. yeah it certainly does...welcome to scrible..keep coming :)

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    2. Karan this is monica...from a gal in city u gave me ur link in my blog.

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    3. Hello Karan This monica from the blog a gal in city...

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    4. hey monica i posted the link as the earlier link was broken...

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  4. This is the result of the hectic schedules and stress of hi-tech era....very common but you portrayed it so well...
    its really sad that u missed the deadline....better luck next time....
    And many thanks for stopping by my blog and sharing your thoughts on my writing...keep sharing.. :)

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    1. welcome odyzz...glad u liked it..keep reflecting :)

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  5. Perfect read! That's the life of a married software engineer couple. Loved it so much Karan! Keep writing.. Good Luck for BAT!

    Someone is Special

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    1. unfortunately it happens very often in today's world
      and could not participate as my system crashed on Sunday :(

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    2. That's sad Karan.. Participate next time surely..

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    3. hey SIS
      thanx for following...that inspires me to keep writing :))

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  6. Don't miss out next time with a content as good as this!:)

    ❤Not Just My Allegories❤

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    1. i surely wont...thnx for appreciating
      keep coming back!!!

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  7. bless the bed, were the strangers "lay" :) good one!

    Do stop by my blog! Kappu

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    1. thnx Kappu
      i've already stopped by ur blog...loved ur post :)

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  8. haha...nice one!
    many of us can relate to this one! :P

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    1. welcome to scrible Dishit...glad u liked it :)

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  9. Last line is very deep. I loved your post. Nice work

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  10. Beautifully written Karan. I wish you'd participate. Better luck next time. :) Great use of words here, I really like the rhyme. :)

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    1. welcome to my blog Harshal
      glad u liked it :)

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  11. sad you couldn't participate karan
    This was so good

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    1. welcome to scribble...as they say there's always a next tym ;)

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  12. Ah this post shud have been fr voting..sad u missed it..great theme fr the topic..finely done..:)

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    1. thnx so much for such high appreciation...welcome to my scribblings..keep dropping by

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  13. Nice one :) Depicting the prevalent situation in my homes nowadays.

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    1. i guess u wanted to say 'many homes'...nyc to 've u here...keep coming back

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  14. Good one.. I guess most couples today want to live a good comfortable life which requires both of them to work. Somewhere in this hectic schedule, marriage has lost its charm :( Sad but true...

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    1. yeah unfortunately its sad but true :(
      welcome to scribble prasanna :)

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  15. nicely done..seemed like a routine poetry :-)

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  16. welcome Diwakar...thnx fr stopping by :)

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  17. Good one, Karan. And I guess, this is a common malady today...!! Sometimes we are unhappy simply because we find life monotonous and boring...the last two lines are poignant!
    Very well done..:))

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    1. welcome to scribble...thanx for appreciating, that means a lot...keep them coming :)

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  18. Again, a very true scenario for a lot of couples. Sad that you missed the deadline! Just a note: If you have an Android app phone, install Blogaway. Its an on the go blogging app for Blogger. Very convenient. You can blog whenever you have time and then save it as draft and publish on the final day. Then the only thing pending would be to post a comment on blog-a-ton!

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    1. thanx for the info Deepa...but i use a symbian phone...lemme know if there's any application for that one.

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    2. crisp post and a Good read.

      The ending was good.

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    3. glad u liked it...keep reflecting

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  19. Very nice, buddy :) This is the kind of poem I understand. I struggle so much with those hi-fi poems.

    What you've written is so easy to understand and relateable. I feel bad you did not post in time... else I am sure this would have fetched you some votes :)

    See you in the next BAT.

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    1. thanx Kshitij for such kind and appreciating words...i always try and keep them simple coz ,many times even i'm unable to understand the high vocabulory ones...i'l surely be around next time...keep inspiring :)

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  20. What's happening. I had commented but it disappeared. Test Comment

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  21. I hope my first comment did reach you. If it did.. please ignore the the other two. If it did not, I will return later and comment again... :)

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  22. This was awesome! It is really sad that u missed it!

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    1. glad u liked it :)
      nyc to 've u here...keep reflecting

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  23. Again I`m glad to see so many poems this BAT.

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  24. hmmm... you know this kinda situation is so rampant among married couples!!! Kinda scary actually. ut nevertheless, you have beautifully and in a very simply manner put forth he situation.

    There is love and a load of hesitation, which has been beautifully expressed.. and this line "God please bless this bed,where strangers in the night lay" ... was the dil ko chu lene waali type .. :)

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    1. hey Menachery its so nyc to have u back...keep dropping by :)

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  25. Beautifully done!
    Liked the concept

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    1. welcome to scribble Simran...hope to see u often :))

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