Its morning,
shouts the alarm!!!
In bed, I still
lie calm
You are already
in the bathroom
I’ve to use the
other room
I’m ready, Oh my
hair is not done
gelling the crop I
also put perfume
You are in the
car, I get
the aroma makes u
hume
but to comment u
resist
I feel my new cut,
you notice
I want to insist,
but the urge to
ask I dismiss
On way to work
Talking is a big
task
Its been busy day
In the evening,
how was the day
I wish, you ask
I come home, its
back to usual
ritual
you give me
ritual hug
I pour you coffee
in the usual mug
On your chest
my head I rest
our hearts are at
mess
wish its just
stress
all work and no
play
god please bless
this bed,
where strangers
in the night lay
KARAN
hmmmmm,..its a good take on the topic indeed!
ReplyDeletedidnt participate in BAT this time????
hey, also if you would turn off the word verification in the comment section, It would simplify the comment process!... just a suggestion ! :)
cud not post it as unfortunately my system crashed on sunday
Deleteand surely i'l do away with the word verification
hey good one ... sad that u missed the deadline...
ReplyDeletethnx amit...keep dropping by :)
Deletethere's always a next tym i guess
Now days its very usual when husband wife become strangers in the night.. all this due to overloaded with office work and other small unresolvable issues :(
ReplyDeleteI hope you will get chance to participate in BAT
yeah it certainly does...welcome to scrible..keep coming :)
DeleteKaran this is monica...from a gal in city u gave me ur link in my blog.
DeleteHello Karan This monica from the blog a gal in city...
Deletehey monica i posted the link as the earlier link was broken...
DeleteHi Karan
ReplyDeleteHappens :) Good One....
thnx jaish...good to 've u here :)
DeleteThis is the result of the hectic schedules and stress of hi-tech era....very common but you portrayed it so well...
ReplyDeleteits really sad that u missed the deadline....better luck next time....
And many thanks for stopping by my blog and sharing your thoughts on my writing...keep sharing.. :)
welcome odyzz...glad u liked it..keep reflecting :)
DeletePerfect read! That's the life of a married software engineer couple. Loved it so much Karan! Keep writing.. Good Luck for BAT!
ReplyDeleteSomeone is Special
unfortunately it happens very often in today's world
Deleteand could not participate as my system crashed on Sunday :(
That's sad Karan.. Participate next time surely..
Deletefor sure!!!
Deletewithout fail :)
hey SIS
Deletethanx for following...that inspires me to keep writing :))
Don't miss out next time with a content as good as this!:)
ReplyDelete❤Not Just My Allegories❤
i surely wont...thnx for appreciating
Deletekeep coming back!!!
bless the bed, were the strangers "lay" :) good one!
ReplyDeleteDo stop by my blog! Kappu
thnx Kappu
Deletei've already stopped by ur blog...loved ur post :)
haha...nice one!
ReplyDeletemany of us can relate to this one! :P
welcome to scrible Dishit...glad u liked it :)
DeleteLast line is very deep. I loved your post. Nice work
ReplyDeletethank you so much ash :)
DeleteBeautifully written Karan. I wish you'd participate. Better luck next time. :) Great use of words here, I really like the rhyme. :)
ReplyDeletewelcome to my blog Harshal
Deleteglad u liked it :)
sad you couldn't participate karan
ReplyDeleteThis was so good
welcome to scribble...as they say there's always a next tym ;)
DeleteAh this post shud have been fr voting..sad u missed it..great theme fr the topic..finely done..:)
ReplyDeletethnx so much for such high appreciation...welcome to my scribblings..keep dropping by
DeleteNice one :) Depicting the prevalent situation in my homes nowadays.
ReplyDeletei guess u wanted to say 'many homes'...nyc to 've u here...keep coming back
DeleteGood one.. I guess most couples today want to live a good comfortable life which requires both of them to work. Somewhere in this hectic schedule, marriage has lost its charm :( Sad but true...
ReplyDeleteyeah unfortunately its sad but true :(
Deletewelcome to scribble prasanna :)
nicely done..seemed like a routine poetry :-)
ReplyDeletewelcome Diwakar...thnx fr stopping by :)
ReplyDeleteGood one, Karan. And I guess, this is a common malady today...!! Sometimes we are unhappy simply because we find life monotonous and boring...the last two lines are poignant!
ReplyDeleteVery well done..:))
welcome to scribble...thanx for appreciating, that means a lot...keep them coming :)
DeleteVery relevant.
ReplyDeleteunfortunately :(
DeleteAgain, a very true scenario for a lot of couples. Sad that you missed the deadline! Just a note: If you have an Android app phone, install Blogaway. Its an on the go blogging app for Blogger. Very convenient. You can blog whenever you have time and then save it as draft and publish on the final day. Then the only thing pending would be to post a comment on blog-a-ton!
ReplyDeletethanx for the info Deepa...but i use a symbian phone...lemme know if there's any application for that one.
Deletecrisp post and a Good read.
DeleteThe ending was good.
glad u liked it...keep reflecting
DeleteVery nice, buddy :) This is the kind of poem I understand. I struggle so much with those hi-fi poems.
ReplyDeleteWhat you've written is so easy to understand and relateable. I feel bad you did not post in time... else I am sure this would have fetched you some votes :)
See you in the next BAT.
thanx Kshitij for such kind and appreciating words...i always try and keep them simple coz ,many times even i'm unable to understand the high vocabulory ones...i'l surely be around next time...keep inspiring :)
DeleteWhat's happening. I had commented but it disappeared. Test Comment
ReplyDeleteI hope my first comment did reach you. If it did.. please ignore the the other two. If it did not, I will return later and comment again... :)
ReplyDeleteThis was awesome! It is really sad that u missed it!
ReplyDeleteglad u liked it :)
Deletenyc to 've u here...keep reflecting
Again I`m glad to see so many poems this BAT.
ReplyDeleteyeah dts a nyc change :)
Deletehmmm... you know this kinda situation is so rampant among married couples!!! Kinda scary actually. ut nevertheless, you have beautifully and in a very simply manner put forth he situation.
ReplyDeleteThere is love and a load of hesitation, which has been beautifully expressed.. and this line "God please bless this bed,where strangers in the night lay" ... was the dil ko chu lene waali type .. :)
hey Menachery its so nyc to have u back...keep dropping by :)
DeleteBeautifully done!
ReplyDeleteLiked the concept
welcome to scribble Simran...hope to see u often :))
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