Ninth day of this year’s National Poetry Writing Month. Today’s prompt is let’s rewrite a famous poem, giving it our own
spin. While any famous poem will do, if you haven’t already got one in mind,
why not try your own version of Cesar Vallejo’s Black Stone Lying on
a White Stone? If you’re not exactly sure how such a poem could be
“re-written,” check out this
recent poem by Stephen Burt, which riffs on Vallejo’s.
Also
I am participating in A to Z Challenge 2014
where we write 26 posts in a month each day on one word from A to Z barring
Sunday's. Today's word is "H".
I have chosen Namrata’s below poem which
she has written as a Guest post on Sheetal’s blog Scribblings. Namrata writes excellent love stories that I have always known, but today I experienced that she has a knack of weaving beautiful poems about love too. She writes at memoirs on her blog Memoirs of Me.
You Light Up My Life
Twinkle in your eyes
A smile that shines
The way you hold me close
Softly yet tenderly like a rose
Hugging my heart and soul,
Kissing my lips and making me whole.
Taking me to a place where it’s just
you and me;
Somewhere between the day and the
night it seemed to be.
A place called nowhere - where the
time stood still,
Our love shining around like it
always will!
It’s the way you make me feel that I
wonder how do I love thee ~
As I lay there next to you with my
head on your chest,
I knew what it felt to be at peace,
what it meant to have all your crevices filled with love
And to be held as if you were never
broken before!
Baby, You Light Up my LIFE
Because you are that flame that kisses the
darkness away and fills it with the joy of love!
Here is my attempt to rewrite the above poem, in my words - I hope I am able to do justice to Namrata's piece.
With the twinkle
in your eyes
And
the smile that you hold,
You
shape my life
You
are my mold.
Softly
you whisper your love
Tenderly
you care,
Treasured
is every moment
Between
you and me
Each
one is rare,
Wherever
we share.
I
am so blessed to have found you,
Hard
to believe, it feels so untrue,
I
am your man and you are my wife,
Whenever
I see you,
You Light Up My Life.
I’ll
always be your Knight,
Because You
Are My Heartbeat
You Are My Guiding Light!!!
~ Karan
herebelow are my friends and co-bloggers
who are also participating in NapoWrimo:
http://andiwrite.com/ – Count
http://janakinagaraj.com/ - Janaki
http://jaibalarao.com/ - Jaibala
http://thoughtspop.wordpress.com/ – Nithya
http://ponderingtwo.blogspot.in/ – Rohan
http://juztamom.blogspot.in/ - Sfurti
Good attempt :)
ReplyDeletethank you Poooja :)
Deleteglad to have you here :)
thank you so much Janu :)
ReplyDeletethat coming from you means a lot!!!
I had first written it without the Heartbeat line, but had to eventually add it as I was short of time to write a different post for A to Z, with that line it sounds much better for me :D
Beautiful Karan! Beautiful!
ReplyDeletethank you so much Pooja :)
DeleteVery nicely done Karan!! :)
ReplyDeletethank you Rohan :)
DeleteReally beautiful poem. I have just discovered the love of poetry through blogging on wordpress, peeking in on challenges etc and am peeking in also at Japanese poetry which intrigues and mystifies me. hello from another a-z blogger x
ReplyDeletethank you so much for dropping by Justine :)
Deleteglad to have you here, will soon be visiting you :)