Wednesday, April 9, 2014

Heartbeat - You Are My Guding Light



Ninth day of this year’s National Poetry Writing Month. Today’s prompt is let’s rewrite a famous poem, giving it our own spin. While any famous poem will do, if you haven’t already got one in mind, why not try your own version of Cesar Vallejo’s Black Stone Lying on a White Stone? If you’re not exactly sure how such a poem could be “re-written,” check out this recent poem by Stephen Burt, which riffs on Vallejo’s.


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I am participating in A to Z Challenge 2014 where we write 26 posts in a month each day on one word from A to Z barring Sunday's. Today's word is "H".

I have chosen Namrata’s below poem which she has written as a Guest post on Sheetal’s blog Scribblings. Namrata writes excellent love stories that I have always known, but today I experienced that she has a knack of weaving beautiful poems about love too. She writes at memoirs on her blog Memoirs of Me.


You Light Up My Life

Twinkle in your eyes
A smile that shines
The way you hold me close
Softly yet tenderly like a rose
Hugging my heart and soul, 
Kissing my lips and making me whole.

 

Taking me to a place where it’s just you and me;
Somewhere between the day and the night it seemed to be.
A place called nowhere - where the time stood still,
Our love shining around like it always will!

It’s the way you make me feel that I wonder how do I love thee ~
As I lay there next to you with my head on your chest,
I knew what it felt to be at peace, what it meant to have all your crevices filled with love
And to be held as if you were never broken before!
Baby, You Light Up my LIFE

Because you are that flame that kisses the darkness away and fills it with the joy of love! 


Here is my attempt to rewrite the above poem, in my words - I hope I am able to do justice to Namrata's piece.

With the twinkle  in your eyes

And the smile that you hold,

You shape my life

You are my mold.



Softly you whisper your love

Tenderly you care,

Treasured is every moment

Between you and me

Each one is rare,

Wherever we share.



I am so blessed to have found you,

Hard to believe, it feels so untrue,

I am your man and you are my wife,

Whenever I see you,

You Light Up My Life.



I’ll always be your Knight,

Because You Are My Heartbeat
You Are My Guiding Light!!! 
~ Karan 
 




herebelow are my friends and co-bloggers who are also participating in NapoWrimo:




10 comments:

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    1. thank you so much Janu :)
      that coming from you means a lot!!!

      I had first written it without the Heartbeat line, but had to eventually add it as I was short of time to write a different post for A to Z, with that line it sounds much better for me :D

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    1. thank you Poooja :)
      glad to have you here :)

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  3. Really beautiful poem. I have just discovered the love of poetry through blogging on wordpress, peeking in on challenges etc and am peeking in also at Japanese poetry which intrigues and mystifies me. hello from another a-z blogger x

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    1. thank you so much for dropping by Justine :)
      glad to have you here, will soon be visiting you :)

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